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I'm back! This ficlet is for [info]scribblesinink who prompted me with: Cowboy!Dean, complete with horse and duster, please. This may or may not be what you had in mind ... *g* Thank you, however, for giving me an excuse to plunk Dean down in my world. :-D

Title: A Thousand Square Miles of Wide Open
Author: ErinRua
Rating: PG
Length: @ 3200 words
Spoilers: None
Characters: Dean, OC, including the equine kind
Notes/Disclaimers/Summary: Dean gets in touch with his inner cowboy. Set pre-series, shortly before Season 1, when Dean was flying solo.



"Like I told you on the phone, only way to get there is horseback," Tex said. Though no older than Dean, the guy stared from under the brim of his black hat in a squinty-eyed way that measured and seemed to find wanting. "Reckon my old saddle will suit you."

Boots crunched the dry earth as the young cowboy - a real one, gangly legs, spurs, and all - turned and struck an actual mosey towards the corrals and barn that stood beneath giant old cottonwood trees. Dean watched and struggled against the distinct sensation of his stomach sinking.

"Hey, uh ... you know I don't know how to ride, right?"

"Not a problem," Tex - okay, his name was really Chris - drawled over his shoulder. "Horse don't know how to be rode."

He was joking. Right? Of course he was, because yeah, Dean got it: he was the pilgrim and John Wayne, there, thought the situation was funny. If they just built more damn roads out here, they wouldn't be having this discussion, let alone planning a trail ride out to deal with some dead freakin' miner's ghost.

The barn yawned in cavernous coolness, scented with hay and horse crap. Heavy bodies shifted in two stalls, the thud of hooves a warning to Dean's ears. It would be just his luck to get trampled to death before he even got in the saddle. A wall of sorrel muscle faced him when he neared the first stall, and he sidestepped hastily when that muscular rump began backing into the aisle.

"This here's Peso," Chris said as he ducked under the horse's neck. "He'll take care of you."

Dean took the reins, exchanged wary looks with one large brown eye, and plastered on a cocky grin. "Dude, I can take care of myself. Just tell him to keep his hooves where they belong."

Chris cocked a sardonic eyebrow. "Whatever you say. C'mon, we're burnin' daylight."

With that, Chris strode away, spurs clanking, and left Dean to contemplate the logistics of getting his ass to an altitude approximately twice its normal elevation. Okay, he'd seen The Unforgiven: he knew how to get on a horse.

He shoved his sawed-off pump shotgun into the saddle scabbard and only then realized a slight logistical problem. A man's natural physiology didn't exactly lend itself to cranking one knee up towards his ear. However, Dean got his foot in the stirrup, grabbed the saddle horn, and pushed off.

And up, and almost over the other side, only a desperate grab at saddle leather and horse hair saving him from an inglorious splat on the floor. Vertigo set in as the barn began swaying past at increasing speed, and Dean hauled himself upright and yanked on the reins.

Nearly got the back of Peso's hundred-pound skull in his teeth, too.

"Just ask him for what you want," Chris said mildly from somewhere behind him. "Don't need to rip his head off."

Peso blew and shook his head, heavy mane tossing, while Dean clenched his teeth and fished for his stirrups. He really hoped Chris wouldn't be a Chatty Kathy, because that smart-ass nasal drawl was going to get old real quick.

All squared away, he gave Peso a nudge with both heels - ask, okay, he could do that - and found his balance as the animal ambled out the door. Didn't look like they'd have to worry much about that daylight Chris had grumbled about, judging by the clouds building over the rawboned hills across the valley.

"Might want to tie this on behind your saddle," Chris said, and Dean twisted to see him leading his horse from the barn, free hand holding out a length of brown cloth.

Dean took it, and winced at a stink that smelled a lot like axel grease. "What is it?"

Chris cast him a pitying look. "Rain slicker."

Dirty brown canvas soaked in motor oil: that ought to turn rain all right, as well as possible small caliber bullets. Grimacing, Dean glanced at Chris, saw how the man rolled the slicker lengthwise to tie behind the saddle, and did his best to emulate.

Then the cowboy swung into his saddle with enviable grace, and headed them out towards the great beyond. Their walking pace jumped into a swinging trot, and within seconds, Dean knew his nuts would never survive the trip.

"If you can't post a trot," Chris offered without looking back, "you can just sort of stand in your stirrups."

Stand what?

"Otherwise you're just beatin' his back with your ass."

Right. Stand in the stirrups. Stand up on two itty bitty wobbling platforms, while galumphing along at fifteen miles per hour. No problem. Somewhat to his surprise, Dean discovered he could balance upright if he sort of let one hand choke the saddle horn.

Ahead, Chris bobbed easily in his saddle, as if his hip bones were welded into the rhythm of his horse's stride. Dean aimed violent thoughts towards the man, but kept his jaw clamped shut. It did seem a bit easier if he let his knees flex a little, like shock absorbers. Okay, he could do this.

However, as the fences slid behind and a broad sweep of sage and salt grass opened before them, he knew this was going to be one long-ass freakin' day.
Miles passed. The broad valley seemed to hang motionless and unchanging before them. The ranch and its old cottonwood trees shrank to a faint haze of green far, far behind. Puffy white clouds cast swatches of shadow that passed across the arid landscape, but the clouds darkened as their shoulders rose ever higher against the sky. On and on, the drumbeat pace carried them across a parched white playa that shimmered with illusionary water.

By now, Dean felt the hammer blows of each mile joggling bolts loose from his bones, but with his guide trotting stoically ahead, he refused to so much as squeak. If Buckaroo Banzai, there, could keep this up, so could Dean Winchester. Hell, this wasn't so bad at all.

The clouds slowly expanded to dark and bloated forms, until a sharp scent of damp alkali knifed past him on a whirling gust.

"Looks like we're gonna get it," Chris observed.

Dean turned his head, the first time in several miles he'd looked anywhere but grimly straight ahead. "Oh, just friggin' great."

Off to their left, a honkin' big black cloud dragged grey skirts of rain straight towards them. Another gust hit and raindrops the size of poker chips slapped pockmarks in the dust. Thunder rumpled dully and one raindrop splashed all across the back of his hand. He bit back a curse as he wiped it off on his shirt.

Thus preoccupied, Dean almost pitched over Peso's head when the horse blundered to a halt.

"Whoa!" he blurted, and felt his face flush crimson as he recovered himself under Chris' bland stare.

"Reckon we ought to brace ourselves," the cowboy said, and swung from his saddle to begin untying his slicker.

Sighing, Dean turned in his seat to untie his own.

"Might want to step off to do that, else Peso could take exception."

Right. Peel his blistered ass off this animal just so he could get off and climb back on again. Why the hell not.

Sighing, Dean bent forward, slung a leg back and over the horse's butt - and his knees buckled the instant he let his weight drop. A thousand pounds of meat suddenly snorted and lunged, and jerked him right off his feet.

"WHOA! SHIT!"

Everything stopped, and Dean found himself hanging at an awkward diagonal with one hand in a fistful of horse mane, while Peso craned his long neck and blew at him suspiciously.

"Right," wheezed Dean. "Nice horse. Just let me get my bearings, okay?"

By the time he got himself resituated to the vertical, Chris had already donned his slicker and remounted, and stared impassively down from his saddle.

"Trick knee," Dean said, forcing a bright grin. "Old football injury."

A dip of hat brim was the man's only response. Yeah, and Cowboy Bill bought that one. Whatever. Wrapping himself in twenty yards of greasy, smelly canvas didn't seem particularly appetizing, but once suitably attired, Dean braced himself, took a breath, and swung himself back into the saddle.

Oh, god, he never should have gotten off the horse. Now his pelvic bones were going to fracture and split like a freakin' wishbone.

"Good to go," Dean said through clenched teeth.

Chris shook his head. "Should have brought a hat, pard," he said, and turned his horse away, gigging it back into that infernal trot.

A rush of wind and rain forestalled any comment, and in seconds, the deluge whooped upon them. Whoever the hell said it didn't rain in the desert clearly hadn't come out here. Water pummeled and drenched Dean's hatless head, pouring down inside that damned slicker and clear to the crack of his ass. Mud splattered from the heels of Chris' trotting horse and slopped up his own pants legs with each of Peso's club-footed strides.

Yeah, Clint Eastwood would be lovin' this, about now. Not.

Then a colossal CRACK and a white blast of light deleted every thought from Dean's mind but, 'Oh, SHIT!' Peso leaped and slammed Dean back in his saddle, where he scrambled madly to recover his balance amidst driving rain and yards of wet, flapping slicker.

"Come on!" Chris' thin shout pierced the downpour.

Peso leapt into a run at the heels of Chris' horse, and all Dean could do was hang on as the rain slashed his face. Moments later, the dark blur of an old barn appeared through the streaming murk, and towards this, Chris led their sloppy charge. Dean flung himself from the saddle just a heartbeat behind Chris, and dragged Peso into the barn's shadowed interior after him.

"WHOO-HOO!" shouted Chris, and Dean turned in disbelief.

The young cowboy stood just in from the streaming eves, water dribbling from his hat brim, and he wore an enormous grin as bright as any madman's. As if feeling Dean's glare, he turned that manic grin towards him.

"Ain't it somethin'?" And Chris laughed, clearly having spent ten years too long in the sun.

Dean, however, simply stood there in the well-greased cocoon of his sodden slicker, and felt rainwater dribbling into his freakin' armpits. Peso snorted explosively and shook his big head, water flinging everywhere.

"Believe me, buddy," said Dean, patting one rain-slick shoulder, "I know just how you feel."

The thunder bashed and lightning flashed several more times, though none as close as that first. While men and horses huddled under cover, Dean felt his muscles stiffen and silently cursed the delay. At length, the storm drifted ponderously off to the east and sunlight reappeared to lift wands of steam from the puddles.

"Best we go," Chris said, back to his marginally sane, laconic self, and stumped out into the muck, horse in tow.

The very thought of crawling back up on that hard-ass saddle made his knees and butt-bones weep. But Dean stifled a groan, imagined Dad's sardonic command, 'Suck it up, dude,' and forced himself back to the job at hand.

More miles crept past. The day's shadow's shortened. Dean steamed like an oyster inside his slicker. Yet although other storm cells marched across the valley breathing deep-voiced rumbles and the scent of rain-soaked sage, he and his guide escaped any further direct hits by Dame Nature.

By noon, however, Dean wouldn't have cared if the wrath of God Himself had burst upon them. No matter how he tried to ease his balance or weight, the insides of his knees screeched blood raw, and he could feel his pelvis cracking like an old windshield with every bludgeoning step. Obviously, Clint Eastwood used a lot of stuntmen, and Dean wondered if he should have looked for someone else to do this part for him, too.

"Just up there," Chris announced, the first words either had spoken in over an hour.

Dean looked ahead to a steep hillside of tumbled rust-and-white colored rocks. Amongst them squatted a hodgepodge of broke-jawed ruins, where a town had once perched on the side of the hill. High above jutted wooden beams, nameless iron junk, and the gravelly spills of mine tailings; all that remained of busted hopes.

"Graveyard's just yonder on that knoll. Not much left of it."

The horses stopped and Dean contemplated the agony of dismounting.

"Right," he sighed.

Thankfully, Peso had stopped with the driver's side facing an uphill slope, so Dean could ease from the saddle with relative ease. At least, it worked until a rock rolled under his heel and nearly flung him beneath the horse. He caught himself by reflex alone, a warm, patient body catching his weight.

"Good boy," he rasped, and patted Peso's shoulder.

Oh, god, now he had to dig up a freaking grave. Going to be a trick, when he could hardly stand.

"Figure we could take turns diggin'," Chris said.

Dean looked at him. Saw only a bland, neutral expression on the cowboy's sun-browned face.

"Sure. Thanks."

The old graveyard was every bit as pathetic as the remains of the mining camp: jumbles of rocks, dry weeds, and a few boards tilting this way and that as grave markers. He counted four white Victorian stones marking the graves of more affluent souls, mine owners or some such, but even those memorials bore the scars and wear of unforgiving Time. In time, the desert would claim those, too.

A small grey stone marked the grave they sought: that of the Lucky Girl Mine's one-time foreman, Robert Joseph Jones.

"That him?" asked Chris.

"Looks like," Dean replied. "If not..." He shot the cowboy a hard grin. "Looks like your hired hands will just keep runnin' from ghosts."

"Rather not," Chris said, and his eyes suddenly caught and held Dean's. "We keep losin' help, we lose this place. And mister, there just ain't any other place I want to be."

Something in that steady gaze, fierce and fearful at once, clamped a tight lid on any further sarcasm from Dean.

"It's what I do, Chris."

The digging wasn't bad. It almost felt good, in fact, to use muscles that were accustomed to the work, and he traded off the shovel back and forth with Chris. The guy was no shirker, that's for sure, and Dean watched, water bottle in hand, as Chris set aside his hat to bend over the shovel, pale forehead gleaming with sweat. Seems the old folks didn't care for digging this rocky ground any more than they did, for old wood cracked beneath Dean's shovel at only three feet down. He looked up at Chris.

"Hey, you might want to fetch me the shotgun from my scabbard." To Chris' puzzled frown, he added, "Rock salt. Keeps the spooks away."

There in the bright, glaring light of day, the cowboy's expression registered doubt, but he got up and went to fetch the sawed-off. Dean kept digging, until broken wood and dry bones lay bared to the pitiless sun. Curls of dry leather still clasped the poor bastard's skeletal ankles.

"Ain't much left of 'im," Chris observed, as he squatted on his haunches at the grave's edge.

"Nope. Hundred and thirty years 'll do that."

"Why's he still here, you suppose?"

Dean clambered out of the grave and stood to mop his sleeve across his brow. "Hard to say. Guess he left some kind of unfinished business. You got that gun your guys found?"

"Yeah."

Chris unfolded himself and went to his horse: came back with a corroded chunk of metal in his hand, recognizable as the frame of an 1873 Colt Peacemaker. A gun that had taken the life of an innocent young woman, before her jealous lover used it to blow his own brains out. Dean took the thing, tossed it into the open grave, and reached for his discarded coat to fetch the salt and lighter fluid. The cowboy squatted back down to watch proceedings.

"Why's that work?" he asked. "Salt? Lighter fluid?"

As the caustic liquid splashed soil and bones, Dean said, "Fire is cleansing. Purifies." He got the cardboard canister of salt and shook it broadly, white grains spraying in the sun. "Salt also purifies plus repels evil. It's one of the few substances on earth that comes out of the ground in pure form, no smelting or refining required. "

"How's that repel evil?"

"Well, the purity of fire and salt has made them sacred to a lot of cultures, and a few thousand years of perfect faith? That's going to create some serious mojo."

"Gold's pure."

"Sure." Dean flashed a grin. "But salt's a helluva lot cheaper to throw away. Stand back."

His practiced flick sent a book of lit matches arcing into the grave, where a whoosh of pale flames burst towards the sun. A whirl of dust may have been the last of Robert J. Jones, or maybe it was just a farewell cough from the storm clouds fading on the horizon.

Dean slanted a sideways look at Chris, who stared into the hungry flames. "Hey. The next time your guys find some old relic out here?"

Ruefully, Chris nodded. "Tell 'em to leave the damned thing be."

Once finished, they headed back at a more leisurely pace. Either Chris decided to take pity on him, or maybe he trusted that the troubles plaguing his family's ranch were over. Whatever, Dean wasn't going to complain.
They finally stopped to water their horses at a galvanized tank marked by a swath of green grass and a huge cottonwood tree.

"You ever want to ... you know, get outta here? See the world?" Dean asked.

Chris shrugged, his attention on the back of his horse's head as it sloshed its muzzle in the cool water. "I been gone. Spent three years in the army. Farted around and did stupid stuff afterwards. Ended up coming back."

He lifted his head, eyes narrowing into the distance, like a cat on a sun-warmed sill.

"This is home," he said. "That's all. Nothin' else I really want."

Then he bumped his horse's head up from the water, backed the animal from the tank. "You want, you can throw your bed out with us, tonight."

Dean frowned and looked out there to see what might lay hidden in the lap of this empty land: saw sagebrush and sunlight and the shadows of little clouds flowing away across the hills. A quarter mile out, several cows and calves grazed, and the sinking sun bathed the valley in golden haze while stands of rye grass shimmered in the breeze. What would it be like to call ten thousand acres 'home'?

"Nah." Dean looked at Chris and gave a crooked grin. "Don't have a bed to throw. Besides, I'm the kinda guy who wants his bed with pizza delivery, a remote control, and free cable TV."

With a snort, Chris bit back a grin and turned his horse towards home. "Suit y'self."

Directly overhead, the old cottonwood tree sighed and whispered like faraway voices. In moments, the sound of hoof beats faded to stillness.

~ * ~

Ed. Note: Amanda, I know you said 'duster' ... but I've never seen anyone use an actual duster on a ranch, whereas a slicker, which looks much the same, is far more practical. :-)
Also - My apologies to fans who love to imagine Dean as being a rider and horseman, but I can't easily picture him finding the time to learn to ride with true proficiency. Besides, I thought it was more amusing this way. ;-)

Comments

[info]pdragon76 wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 04:28 am (UTC)
*pats belly*

That there was a damn satisfying read. *belches* Yup. Thank you very much. :)

You have a very artful turn of phrase that I enjoy muchly.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 01:35 am (UTC)
Dragons, your feedback is the most funniest and clever I've seen in a while. *smishes smoky you* Thank you for reading and saying such nice things! :-)
[info]roguebitch wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 04:35 am (UTC)

Oh, I *liked* this! I just love the feel of it, and the sort of understanding that Dean and Chris arrive at, despite their different backgrounds. Very well done. ;-D
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 01:36 am (UTC)
Thank you, luv! I'm so glad you enjoyed this. :-) This story sort of evolved as it went, so I'm very glad the organic process played out the right way for you. Thanks! :-)

P.S. What is your icon? It's so lovely, looks like Celtic knot work ....
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[info]kayden_eidyak wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 04:57 am (UTC)
Actually, that's exactly how I always imagined Dean on a horse. I've even thought about it a couple times. I'm so happy you wrote it so splendidly just as I thought it ought to be if anyone ever did. Cuz Dean definitely ain't no farm boy and prefers things that are covered in chrome rather than hairy hides. Awesome!
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 01:37 am (UTC)
LOL, yup, Dean is a chrome guy, through and through. *smishes you* Thanks so much for reading and saying such nice things. :-)
[info]jackfan2 wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 08:08 am (UTC)
HEEEEEE!! LOVED IT!

I know Jensen can ride, but I'm betting he'd love the chance at physical humor and represent Dean's inexperience on the seat of a horse. You drew the perfect picture of how I think he'd handle the senario.

"Trick knee," Dean said, forcing a bright grin. "Old football injury." ROFL.. that's our Dean *snort*

Chris shook his head. "Should have brought a hat, pard," he said, and turned his horse away, gigging it back into that infernal trot. HAHAHAHA.. I love LOVE stoic, cowboy Chris. He's just perfect. I could so our grizzeled Clint Eastwood, like SPN could afford him, in that role. And he called Dean 'pard'.. *giggles*

"Hey, you might want to fetch me the shotgun from my scabbard." To Chris' puzzled frown, he added, "Rock salt. Keeps the spooks away." Aw, and now Dean's in his element *settles back all comfy-like. It's been a loooong time since I rode, since I owned a horse, but I know exactly how Dean feels.. well, except for the bart about his balls... :D

"Nah." Dean looked at Chris and gave a crooked grin. "Don't have a bed to throw. Besides, I'm the kinda guy who wants his bed with pizza delivery, a remote control, and free cable TV." Yeeeup, that about sums up our Dean Winchester. That's his 'home on the range'.

Loved it! There must be a run of writers wanting to plant Dean in ass-less chaps and forking leather, coz I found a new story at ffnet with Dean landing himself in a ghost town that is completely cursed and the town-folk have trapped him in their world. Great read.

Then I find out that one of my fav authors, [info]gaelicspirit has a western SPN fic in the works too. Now, to a western genre geek like me, all this news just warms the cockles of my heart.

I think someone even asked Kripke at Comic Con if he'd planned a western episode this season or next. All he would say was that they're looking into the idea. God I hope they do that.

'Til then, I'll just enjoy the happy trails of brilliant authors!


[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 01:47 am (UTC)
Oh, what a joysome surprise this is, to see such wonderful and thorough feedback from you! *capers gleefully* Thank you so much for taking the time to point out bits you especially liked - especially since some are my faves, too. *g*

LOL, well, I don't blame fandom for wanting cowboy!Dean. It is a rather delicious thought. And omg, if Kripke DID do a Western SPN episode? I'd die happy. Hee! It would be awesome if Gaelicspirit did one, too. I'll keep a eye out in her direction, once she finishes her current epic. :-) Thanks so much again for the wonderful feedback!
[info]nightowlv wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 08:10 am (UTC)
I can very much picture Dean hanging onto the horse for dear life, wishing he was safe behind the wheel of the Impala. I thought this description of Dean's experience on horseback was spot on. And the story's imagery and overall feel was excellent. I could practically see the storm clouds rolling in. Nicely done. I really enjoyed this. :)
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 01:48 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! I held very clear visuals in my own mind's eye, while writing, so I'm very glad it played as well for you. Thanks for reading! :-)
[info]scribblesinink wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 10:26 am (UTC)
Oh...! That was... was... awesome doesn't begin to cover it!! I didn't have a clear idea of what I wanted "Cowboy!Dean, complete with horse and duster" (a rain slicker works just as well, it's all about the imagery ;-)) to be like, but this definitely hits in all the right places!

Did you see this: and the boys will probably not do an episode as cowboys wearing ass-less chaps, as Jensen Ackles jokingly requested. (links to despoilered version of interview at [info]spnfencentral so safe to click)? I kinda feel like sticking my tongue out in Kripke's direction and go "neener neener, we'll just do it ourselves, then, you big spoilsport"!

I love how Dean just grits his teeth, "sucks it up" and keeps going to get the job done because, damn, that must hurt! LOL, Dean's going to need that pizza delivery and remote control, because I don't think he'll be able to move for the next couple of days!

I adore Chris, he's very credible, all gruff and stoic and a man of few words but so clearly at home where he is. And your landscape descriptions are incredibly vivid, I can almost feel/smell the desert!

Also, the contrast between how far out of his element Dean was on horseback, and how the tables were turned once they reached the graveyard, and suddenly Dean was the expert was great!

All in all, amazing job! I love this story, and thank you so much for writing it!
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 01:57 am (UTC)
She liked it, she liked it! WHEEE! *g*

No, I hadn't seen the article on SPNFenCentral - thanks for that! I'm hiding from as many spoilers as I can, lol, so I hadn't read the article. Hee! Aww, c'mon, Eric - Jensen has a good idea there, lol!

It also cracks me up to see the context of Eric's remark about Sam and Dean not brothers: I've seen a number of sad, hysterical souls who think he was speaking for real. *face-palm*

Anyhow, YAY! I am so glad you liked this! I realy enjoyed the challenge of it all, from judging Dean's reactions to resolving the story so the pieces all wove together in a satisfying way. Ranching and the big, wide open country is my world, the supernatural is Dean's, so I am VERY glad your prompt led me to combine the two! I should do that more often ... Well, maybe not. We don't want Dean permanently damaged, lol!

And thank you for the pimpage. I blush. *hugs you* Thanks for the awesome prompt!!!!!
[info]tahirire wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 01:47 pm (UTC)
This was very well written, I love the imagery of it, the descriptions of the land and the storm especially. And Chris was awesome, so many cowboys are just like that. I was glad Dean got to reclaim a little of his dignity towards the end. ;-)

LOL, poor Dean! This story is spot on how he'd be on a horse! I feel for him, I've been caught in a surprise storm on a long trail ride before - in 30 degree weather no less - and it SUCKS. :-)

... he's not going to be able to walk the next few days. *pets dean* Hope the motel has room service. ;-)
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 02:03 am (UTC)
LOL, no, I don't think Dean will be very chipper for the next two or three days, poor love. ;-) Thank you so much for reading and leaving such nice feedback! It's especially good to hear from a fellow rider, who can empathise with the torment I put our poor boy through. ;-) Thanks for reading!
Cheers ~

Erin
[info]saberivojo wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 01:48 pm (UTC)
I kind of whimpered a bit. I have been longing for cowboy Dean.

Feel bad for the boy though, I have ridden all my life. Me and my hubs and I went on a two day trail ride in the mountains for our 12 anniversary. I had a ball but but hubs suffered with a blistered butt for the next week!

Anyway, great fic. I have to say, now I have thoughts of Dean dripping wet on horse back.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 02:17 am (UTC)
Heh, dripping wet Dean on horseback can't possibly be a bad thing, now can it? *G* Thanks so much for reading! LOL, being a rider yourself, I love that you can doubly appreciate poor Dean's pain. Heh. Hee! :-) Thank you for the lovely feedback!
[info]tanaquisga wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 02:06 pm (UTC)
This is just perfect - thank you for taking up [info]scribblesinink's challenge. (Hee, and now I don't have to write this one myself. *g*)

I really liked the contrast of the two men in and out of their very different elements/environments - with both a level of mutual incomprehension and a level of mutual respect between them.

Your descriptions of the landscape and Dean's experience of riding were wonderfully concrete and tangible - I could really see what was going on - but you also made the landscape very lyrical and Chris's love for it shone through. And I liked the way you let the plot and why Chris was taking Dean out there develop slowly and emerge as part of the story rather than giving us a lot of exposition at the start.

And I absolutely agree that, whatever Jensen may be able to do, I don't see Dean's life giving him the chance to learn to ride. (Although that means that ow, ow, ow, he is gonna hurt at the end of this....)

*claps and bows* Great work!!!
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 03:06 am (UTC)
Thank you *so* much for this awesome feedback! :-) I had a very strong visual in my head of every scene, so I'm glad it played out that way for you. It was fun to play with the contrasts in characters, and to sort of let the story tell itself. LOL, and yes, poor Dean is gonna be one hurtin' unit for the next two or three days! *G* Thank you again!
[info]bardicvoice wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 03:10 pm (UTC)
This was delightful! Great atmosphere, trademark-funny Dean, evocative description - good all around.

Thanks for the ride!
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 03:06 am (UTC)
Thank *you* for coming along! :-) I'm so glad you enjoyed this story as much as I enjoyed writing it.
[info]dotfic wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 03:17 pm (UTC)
The atmosphere in this is terrific, I like your OC, and the details and Dean trying to figure out how to ride a horse is perfect. I agree that it's hard to see how or when he would have been able to learn to ride, but Dean on horseback in a cowboy setting is an enticing and I think fitting image. Kripke did say, somewhere, that Supernatural is essentially a western.

Nice insights into the nature of Dean's work. I know Dean says he wants his free cable and his pizza, but he seems content with a spare life, an unspoken parallel to the cowboy here.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 03:11 am (UTC)
Gosh, thank you for the awesome feedback! *beams* I'm really amazed by how well this story went over. Clearly cowboy!Dean is an unfilled market in SPN fan fic, lol. Thanks so much for taking the time to read, and to share your thoughts about it. :-)
[info]bowtrunckle wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 03:48 pm (UTC)
Simply amazing. I love your metaphor choices. You really did a great job of conveying the FEEL of a southwest storm blowing up out of nowhere. And as much as I love Sam and Dean reminiscing about Sam, I love that you made this fic just about Dean (I thought you might delve into Dean's headspace about him missing Sam when he and Chris were digging up the grave). Dean on a horse is awesome regardless if he's an expert or a novice rider. :) Thanks for the great read.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 03:14 am (UTC)
I *love* your "rock on" icon! Hee!

I also adore this incredibly awesome feedback you left. :-) Thank you for telling me the stuff you especially enjoyed, and thanks as well for taking the time to read! *smishes you*

Woops, hit post too quick - I also meant to say that I hesitated over letting Dean reminisce and miss Sam whilst grave digging ... But I let the moment pass. In my mind I placed this pretty late in the game, probably not that long before Dad disappeared, so by now Dean is accustomed enough to working solo that I could get away with just letting him do the job sans distractions.

Though maybe I also missed a good chance for a little heart-tug angst ... *G*

Edited at 2008-08-11 03:16 am (UTC)
[info]art_savage wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 05:12 pm (UTC)
The world really needs more cowboy!Dean.

Seriously. Like, lots. Even if he's not all that great with the horsemanship.

And calling the horse "Peso"...I see what you did there! ;)
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 03:18 am (UTC)
LOL, clearly cowboy!Dean is a waiting market! Heh, and I have to confess that the Peso-Chris connection, here, was purely due to my subconscious! I was fishing around for names whilst writing, and those two just miraculously floated into mind ... Heh, Mag7 just lingers in the back of my mind, obviously! ;-) Thanks so much for reading!
[info]arliss wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 09:00 pm (UTC)
I have a lot of serious love for this story. I want to see Jensen do an actual western, but I think you're dead on in how Dean would approach the whole thing. Loved Tex, and how much he loved his life and made no apologies for it. Also loved Dean getting to do what he knows, and being appreciated for it. Nice work.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 03:21 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! I really enjoyed plunking Dean down out of his element, and into mine, amongst characters and settings I know and love. Hee, and agree, Jensen in a western would be awesome! He really has the look for it, and his depth of acting I think would lend itself to creating something really memorable, character-wise, if he were given the right script. Mm, sweaty, dusty, terse-spoken Jensen - the heart fairly swoons. ;-)

Meanwhile, thank you for reading and leaving such lovely feedback! :-)
[info]hugemind wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 09:34 pm (UTC)
Eeee, cowboy!Dean! *loves madly* I have so much love for fics that throw our boys into the western genre. The descriptions and the atmosphere were beautiful and your Dean voice was just perfect (as it always is).

Thankfully, Peso had stopped with the driver's side facing an uphill slope--

Hee, of course Dean would find a 'driver's side' even when on horseback. :D
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 03:38 am (UTC)
LOL, I had special fun writing the "driver's side" bit. *G* Glad you enjoyed, and thanks so much for the lovely feedback! :-) *HUGS!*
[info]zanne68 wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 09:58 pm (UTC)
This is awesome! I read it this morning, and I've only now started coming up with some way to express how much I like it. I love the imagery and characterizations, but what really strikes me is the flow and feel of familiarity. I don't know any more about horses than Dean does, but I do know barns and countryside and country people, and you just nailed the essence of all that. Right down to Chris' exhiliration at being caught in a thunderstorm in the middle of nowhere and his joke at the "pilgrim's" expense. Great piece!
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 04:03 am (UTC)
Hee, thank you muchly much! I was writing about people and country I knew, so I'm glad that paid off. Putting Dean in the middle of it all was just (very handsome) icing on the cake. Thanks so much for reading, and for the generous feedback! *HUGS!*
[info]may7fic wrote:
Aug. 3rd, 2008 10:07 pm (UTC)
Oh, now wasn't this just a lovely taste of nostalgia for me? I know this Chris is in no way Mr. Larabee but, reading your words, in this setting felt a little like "home" to me and this story was a true pleasure to read.

This had a wonderfully textured, old west feel to it and I loved reading about fish-out-of-water-but-stubborn-as-hell Dean.

Well done, pard ;).
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 04:04 am (UTC)
I did have fun writing a Western setting again. :-) Heh, and the name "Chris" just slipped out of my subconscious, but hey, it is kind of serendipitously fitting, ennit? *G* I'm delighted you enjoyed this so well, and thank you for the wonderful feedback! *hugs!*
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[info]just_ruth wrote:
Aug. 4th, 2008 12:00 am (UTC)
Love this! Yes, I know, most of us have seen the clips on YouTube back in Jensen's DOOL days when he sat a fine saddle, so we'd like to think Dean can do the same.

Still - nice to see him out of his element and I *like* Chris. (He doesn't happen to have blue eye, does he? Like a certain actor/country singer?) He sounds like he rode out of a "Tall Texan" romance.

Great stuff! Thank you!
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 04:07 am (UTC)
I'm glad out-of-his-element cowboy!Dean worked for you, even with fandom's prefered penchant of him as a competant horseman. LOL, what's the fun of fiction, after all, if we can't fly in the face of convention once in a while. *G*

I actually did imagine Chris, here, as having blue eyes, but what country singer/actor have you in mind? LOL, a model for my character would be fine! *g*

Thanks for reading and for the feedback! :-)
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[info]yourlibrarian wrote:
Aug. 7th, 2008 09:13 pm (UTC)
I'm fairly sure that if the show ever had them on a ranch case that they'd have Dean play that way. And actually the better you can ride the easier to carry off the awkwardness too :> I'll bet he'd be remembering this case for all the wrong reasons!
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 04:08 am (UTC)
LOL, I agree - Jensen would pull off an awesome Dean-the-dude because his riding skills would enable him to make it even more painful. Hee! Let's hope he one day gets the chance, huh? *g* Meanwhile, thanks so much for reading! Yes, I think poor Dean is gonna be a long time forgetting this case. Owch. ;-)
[info]musesfool wrote:
Aug. 10th, 2008 02:20 am (UTC)
Aw, man, poor Dean. I feel his pain. I do think he'd suck it up and do the job, and then get back behind the wheel of the Impala and swear never to leave her again.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 11th, 2008 04:10 am (UTC)
LOL, yup, Dean will probably never want to get near horses again, unless their under his baby's hood. *G* Thanks so much for reading! *smish*
[info]persnickett wrote:
Aug. 10th, 2008 05:02 am (UTC)
Nice
I enjoyed this. What fangirl doesn't love herself up some Cowboy!Dean. And the oyster-steaming slicker! You also gotta love Cowboy Chris/Buckaroo Banzai. Do you ride per chance?

I love it when Dean's inner narrative combines daily Deanisms like cussing and 'long-ass freakin' days' with the poetry of 'poker chip rain', 'knifing past on a whirling gust', and 'unforgiving time' staking the desert's claims. And you do it so seamlessly. Beautiful.

PS - I like how you made Dean such a noob with horses. Because for me, while Jensen may know his way around a saddle, Dean said it himself - he drives EVERYWHERE.

[info]erinrua wrote:
Aug. 10th, 2008 05:19 am (UTC)
Re: Nice
Thank you SO much for such lovely feedback! You made me smile this (________) big. *g*

And yes, I do ride, have for @ 25 years. My hubby and I worked for years cowboying on ranches (not dude outfits!) and packing mules for guide/outfitter services in the mountains. Nowadays we just sort of day-help for people once in a while, but for a long time, we made most of our living, meager though it was, on horseback.

Which is to say that I knew *exactly* the sort of country Dean and Chris, here, are riding through! It's randomly somewhere in northern Nevada, where the scenery looks suspiciously like that around Austin or Ely ... *G*

And yes, Jensen may ride, but Dean prefers his horses made of Detroit steel. :-p Thanks so much for reading!
Cheers ~

Erin
[info]rinkle wrote:
Aug. 22nd, 2008 05:02 am (UTC)
Fabulous visuals. Loved greatly.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2008 06:28 am (UTC)
Again, LJ is making me look bad. ;-) Thank you for reading and taking time to let me know you enjoyed this. I have to admit that writing Dean in my own home country was a joy to my writing senses. I'm so glad the visual quality of this worked for you, too! :-)
[info]maychorian wrote:
Sep. 29th, 2008 05:05 am (UTC)
You have such a gorgeous turn of phrase. It's like being there. I had such a clear feeling of the open spaces, the hard rain, Chris's exhilaration and Dean's discomfort, and then how the roles were reversed when it came to vanishing the ghostie. Great fic.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Oct. 2nd, 2008 08:26 pm (UTC)
OMG, your ICON! *ROFdyingofL* Oh, that's priceless! *SNORK!!*

And meanwhile - thank you for your feedback! I'm so glad my visuals really put you with Dean in those wide-open spaces, as I truly *wanted* to put readers out there with him. This fic was particularly a labor of love, placing Dean in a part of my world, I'm delighted the story worked so well for you. Thank you for reading! :-)
[info]arrenall wrote:
Feb. 23rd, 2009 08:48 pm (UTC)
A Thousand Square Miles of Wide Open
I loved this! I agree with you, Dean would NOT be a rider. Not a good one anyway. He's probably the sit-up-there-and-look-as-cool-as-possible type. Heck, he doesn't like camping either. This was fabulous. You do have a way with imagery and a turn of phrase.
[info]erinrua wrote:
Feb. 25th, 2009 06:23 am (UTC)
Re: A Thousand Square Miles of Wide Open
Wow, thank you so much! It's so wonderful to discover a new reader. I'm delighted you found this story and that you see the same things in Dean that I do. Bless his stubborn heart. *G*

Thank you for reading!
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